The Sabre Creed

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#1 edtoro

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Posted 01 September 2010 - 07:02 PM

Updated once again. I refined most of the bullets to be less of a sworn into duty thing, and its more of a declaration of what we are. Also, took out most off the the I promises, the most annoying thing about my previous attempt.

Our role is not clearly defined,
So our duties will be those of our fallen teammates.
I will not wait to be called upon,
I am a Sabre, I am always by my Team's side,
Ready to engage enemies at a moments notice.
I am a warrior, but I am also a tactician,
Capable of finding the most efficient way to execute our mission.
I promise to guide my Hammer, guard my dagger, lead my Broadsword and be the eyes of my sniper and my Commander's #2 man.
I am the best my team has to offer, yet I am nothing without them.

I am a Sabre, If we can't do it, it doesn't need to be done.

This post has been edited by edtoro: 09 September 2010 - 04:20 PM

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#2 cools22

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Posted 01 September 2010 - 09:08 PM

pretty good, but the i promise is a bit tacky .... ill try ti figure something out to go in place of that and keep most if not all of your original work.

#3 Jones

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Posted 02 September 2010 - 08:34 AM

cools22, on 01 September 2010 - 11:08 PM, said:

pretty good, but the i promise is a bit tacky .... ill try ti figure something out to go in place of that and keep most if not all of your original work.

I agree completely. The i promise thing could change. The last half is pretty cool though.

#4 edtoro

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Posted 09 September 2010 - 04:21 PM

edtoro, on 01 September 2010 - 10:02 PM, said:

Updated. Post comments/appraisal.

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#5 edtoro

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Posted 12 September 2010 - 06:24 PM

Bump

Official Saber Recognition Group:#796
Furthermore - if you are "deuce-ing" during a game, you have more things to worry about than camo kneepads. - ger
"Nothing is true, everything is permitted"