A Parent's Guide To Paintball Why Paintball isn't nearly as scary as you think.
Posted 26 August 2008 - 03:35 PM
Wow Marauder Pilot. you are awsome! you convinced my mom into letting me play paintball!! thank you SO much!!! add me if you want.
Posted 28 August 2008 - 07:56 AM
I'd like to offer some edits to this post as it is stickied and will likely reach the hands of parents.
1) You've used THEN in several places where it should be THAN. Then is a word indicating sequence (first this happens, then that, etc). Than is the word you need for comparisons (this is better than that).
2) You've used a couple of acronyms that should be spelled out the first time it is used. For example: FPS (Feet Per Second). The rest of the time you use that acronym you don't have to explain it, but you should include the parenthetical explanation the first time you use any acronym.
I hope you are not offended by my (hopefully) constructive criticism. I only offer it because the rest of your essay is outstanding, and it deserves due consideration. I thoroughly enjoyed this post.
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Posted 06 March 2009 - 06:15 PM
"So, why is paintball so safe? Two reasons. One, a paintball is physically incapable of causing any serious harm to someone. A single paintball weighs a few grams and, even travelling at 300 FPS, will only leave welts and tiny bruises that are gone in a day or two"
I know what you're trying to say, but the sentence is inaccurate. A paintball to the eye can cause serious harm. And I broke a guys finger with a paintball when he tried to bunker me.
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Posted 26 August 2009 - 05:49 PM
Posted 09 September 2009 - 05:18 PM
he probably clicked reply to the wrong thread thinking this was the general rants thread.
Doorbells? Seriously? That's the swear filter? . -Pirate
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Posted 04 April 2010 - 09:00 AM
Now I must also show this to my friend's mom.
Thank you very much for this excellent post. This will go a long way toward getting parents' approval of the sport. I'll be sharing this with my friends.